If I thought finding a successful blog about the college experience with a profile or "about the author" statement was difficult, it was even more difficult to find one with a description. In fact, I wasn't able to find a true, full-fledged description. Of the very limited descriptions I was able to find, this one was my favorite. Why you might ask? It was simple, creative, related well to the title of the blog, and left me interested to read more.
Now, for drafting...
Whoever said college is a journey was right. It is a journey- a journey of self-discovery. In college, you learn more than about how humans evolved or why the Roman empire fell. You learn about yourself: who you are, who you were, and who you will become. This blog is a place for me to reflect on what I've learned in college so far. Hopefully through reading about my experiences, you will be able to better appreciate your own and to learn how to look inside yourself as I have. So come with me, and let the journey begin...
Amanda, I like the placement of both your description and about me (maybe move the latter up to the top-right of the page?) and noticed that neither had really changed since the drafting stage.
ReplyDeletea.) I think the strongest part about you about me statement is the philosophical statement that it makes in the second half. I think the whole statement could be condensed a bit, but the message is strong and a positive one. If anything, the weakest part of the about me is the first half when you are describing yourself. I think that what you do say is positive, but a bit generic, tell us something about yourself that is special or quirky, something memorable. I don't think that anything should really be removed, but just worded a bit more tightly.
b.) I think the strongest part about your blog description is that it doesn't feel stiff and mechanistic. It is personal, it explains the blog, and it does so fluidly and with a bit of personality. All in all, I think its a very strong description. I think the weakest part of the description is it's vagueness. Now I know that maybe even you don't know what this blog might be exactly about, but maybe you could word it differently. I like the "learn more than about how humans evolved or why the Roman empire fell. You learn about yourself", but maybe link it back to yourself, make the history fact reference more obvious, and make the second half more personal. Or, feel free to change nothing at all, I may not know what you're going for. Good luck!